tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2419372459610974335.post8794951297391113956..comments2024-02-21T13:21:16.930+05:30Comments on Pondering Two: Silent LoveRohan Kachaliahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14301831176080371483noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2419372459610974335.post-68178584354883167192013-02-11T12:56:42.038+05:302013-02-11T12:56:42.038+05:30Nice effort.
I have no clue about 55 word fiction...Nice effort. <br />I have no clue about 55 word fiction or any fiction for that matter. So take my words with a pinch of salt. <br /><br />Simultaneously may convey the meaning, however, that is not the right word. Replacing simultaneously with at a time would be better. In the next line we come to know about the binocular. You can change the previous line by removing "in no time" to clutching his binoculars or something and then gasping for breath. Nothing is sacrosanct. You can keep on playing with words and fine tune to your satisfaction. Keep on writing and you will get better and better. <br />Cheers,<br />SabyasachiArjunaUbachahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14353186902659651125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2419372459610974335.post-78463829955074662832013-02-11T12:39:21.568+05:302013-02-11T12:39:21.568+05:30Nice try Rohan, tender love captured is so few wor...Nice try Rohan, tender love captured is so few words.Woman'n'Beyondhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07531334717489796258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2419372459610974335.post-69326239259783781102013-02-10T20:43:56.998+05:302013-02-10T20:43:56.998+05:30nice !! am sure d more u write more refined nd cap...nice !! am sure d more u write more refined nd captivating yr f-55 will bcom !! ny story with an unexpected twist is always a treat for d readers nd f-55 is no exception !! ..gud wrk though :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com