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Wednesday, 31 July 2013

Nervy and Ably

Published on: 7/31/2013 06:30:00 pm by Rohan Kachalia - 28 comments

Mystery
He blinked his eyes so as to stop tears from flowing.
‘Do it’, she ordered.
Nervy, he pushed the plunger into the deltoid muscle, thrusting the medicine into the system.
‘What are you doing’? She screamed. 
Upon her screaming, he opened his eyes to find the needle injected into the cotton sheets and he shuddered.

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Love

‘Do it,’ will you? She ordered. 
I rose from my deck chair to look directly into her eyes.
Cool breeze played with her tresses as I tugged the flying strands behind her ear.
Pulling her close, I tilted her face upwards to match my height.
I blew.
She relaxed.
Foreign particle had left her eye.



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28 comments:

  1. Grace Grits and Gardening31 July 2013 at 18:57

    Excellent.

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  2. Anonymous31 July 2013 at 19:14

    Both the stories are very nicely done :)

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  3. kalpana solsi31 July 2013 at 19:28

    The first one was so hilarious . the second one is so tender and I expected something else. But it was only a foreign particle.

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    1. Rohan Kachalia24 August 2013 at 10:27

      Sorry for the late reply... The comment was in the spam folder..hence...

      Glad that you loved both :)

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  4. Debbie D. 31 July 2013 at 20:48

    Both stories with surprise endings. Well done! :-D

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    1. Rohan Kachalia2 August 2013 at 15:45

      Thanks Debbie! Yes a slight twist in the end makes a good read! :D

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  5. Corinne Rodrigues31 July 2013 at 20:53

    Bossy lady, ain't she? ;)
    I like how you used the words 'do it' in both your 55ers, Rohan! Clever!

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    1. Rohan Kachalia2 August 2013 at 15:47

      LOL! Inspired from someone very close :P
      Thanks Corinne! A word from you made my day!!! :)

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  6. Kajal Kapur1 August 2013 at 09:09

    Ohhhhohoohhhhh!! and Awwww!!

    I loved both the pieces...now I need to get mine on order :)

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    1. Rohan Kachalia2 August 2013 at 15:50

      Haha.... cannot get a better reaction than this!! :)
      Looking forward to read your entry, Kajal. :)

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  7. Nisha’s diaries2 August 2013 at 04:10

    I loved the love story what an end

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  8. Unknown2 August 2013 at 05:33

    Awesome. Well done!!

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  9. Suzy3 August 2013 at 13:50

    What a cute end to the love story - made me chuckle. Very nice.
    Dropping by from the 55Fiction linkup.

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    1. Rohan Kachalia7 August 2013 at 15:54

      Thanks Suzy! Glad that brought a smile on your face :)

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  10. Me4 August 2013 at 13:38

    Mr Rohan ...I read this story at two different times and I laughed the second time, it interpreted differently today :P
    Waise, are U scared of needles too?

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    1. Rohan Kachalia7 August 2013 at 15:56

      Oh wow! You read it two times!! *Yayy*
      But what made you laugh the second time and not the first time? Yes and no, sometimes scared :P

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  11. Bhavya N5 August 2013 at 12:19

    She seems to be one bossy lady. Nicely done! :)
    What a night!
    Ishithaa

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  12. Richa Singh9 August 2013 at 17:36

    The combination looked like speaking of the same couple. This one is rohan and hetal? Is it :D :D

    Richa

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    1. Rohan Kachalia12 August 2013 at 14:56

      Haha Richa.... Nope this isn't me and Hetal :)

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  13. Soulz Rebel11 August 2013 at 21:23

    Lol at the second story...I wasn't expecting that..you got me there.

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  14. Anonymous12 August 2013 at 23:03

    Hey, it's such a lovely 55 words challenge:)

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