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Tanay had
left very early in the morning for his office. It was just 6.30 am. On other
days he leaves at 9 am but today was something special. Today was the result of
the performance evaluation which had happened last week. He was very upbeat as
he had a strong gutfeeling of his elevation from Asst.Manager to General
Manager.
The alarm rang sharp at 5.30 in
the morning. After putting the alarm off he went close to his wife and cuddled
her. His lips were against her, murmuring through her ears, sliding his hands
through her thighs, he kissed and kissed.
Tanay bid her goodbye with a
tight hug along with a smile and left for the office. Before reaching the
office he took a small halt at a nearby temple to pray to the Lord and spend
few minutes of peace and gear himself for the stressful day at work.
On setting to drive again, he
received a sms from his wife mentioning how she misses and waits for him to
arrive in the eve and take her in his arms and never end loving her. He smiled
at reading the sms and sent a reply to her saying “Wait for tonight. It will be
as special as our first night.”
With a big smile on his face he
started to drive again. Tanay was more than 100 percent sure of his promotion
to the GM post and thus had planned to surprise her wife and make it special
for them. He was just waiting for the official confirmation of his promotion.
And within an hour he reached his office.
The office was very active and
buzzing with theories of promotion – who will get promoted and who will not. He
went straight to his desk, ignoring all the calls and shouts from other
employees to engage himself with the grapevine. He opened his inbox and was
delighted to see a mail from the HR Head of the company. The mail communicated
the much anticipated and much deserved promotion to the post of General
Manager. He was thrilled and excited about his promotion. He broke this news to
the near and dear ones but asked them to not to tell his wife as a part of
surprise and they obliged. Congratulatory messages poured in from everywhere.
He had everything planned before
hand to surprise his wife and have a good time together. So swiftly he selected
few of their photographs and sends it to the photo studio for creating a huge
photo frame of various memories shared together. Then he called a florist and
asked the fellow to deliver a bouquet at his residence every hour starting from
1 pm till 6 pm containing various flowers beautifully mixed with red roses
along with a big, tower size bouquet consisting of red roses and a hand written
note which read:
"It’s been only a year and a half
since we became One, sharing a roller coaster ride where the day just doesn’t pass
by and night just doesn’t feel sufficient.
Brace yourself for another one
such night where there will be moments of intimacy and the burning desire to
Love; the moments which define WE.
I am expecting you at the City
Palace restaurant at 8 pm tonight draped beautifully in a sari.
With Love, Tanay."
At last she welcomed the big
tower sized bouquet. Her face reading confusion, excitement and surprise all
together. She just couldn’t understand what was happening. She saw the note attached
to the bouquet and read it. Tears rolled down her eyes as she was reading the
note. She thought to herself:
“There is no one that can stop us loving eachother
more than before apart from death” She then quickly texted him “Waiting to see
you my love, my eyes have became red and only you can make it beautiful by
getting lost into it. See you at 8. Bye.”
He, as before, didn’t reply
though he wanted to. He completed his entire work and left office bit early so
that he can reach on time. As he left his office premises and walked towards
his car, he heard a loud explosion which made him flew 200 mts away and there
he was lying in a pool of blood. Yes, it was a terrorist attack. A time bomb
had been planted at the commercial complex where his office was located. He
sustained severe head injuries and it was the last time he remembered her,
visualized her before taking a ride to heaven.
Yes, many things were left to be
explained to her, An Untold Story
was left to be told but unfortunately he couldn’t. Everything changed within and
around her. Tanay was no more to Love her, to feel her, to caress her, to talk to
her, to spend the life together. She was all alone with the only company of
tears and loneliness.
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Speechless!! Nicely written and brought out the emotions in me.. :)
ReplyDeleteThe end was predictable but your narration was excellent... I liked it ...
ReplyDeleteAmit - The Frevolous Analyser
That's a sad end but written beautifully. :)
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Very well written.
ReplyDeleteFor the Starting till the second last paragraph.. Wow wow wow and wooooooow.... I love reading stories like this.. End makes me sad... as I always pray the two who love each other should never get apart..
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emotional piece with a sad ending ..
ReplyDeleteyour narration was quite good...
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OMG..though i saw it coming..but still you van never be ready for a tragedy...reading or bearing.
ReplyDeletegood work
All the good things did signal some sad occurrence coming up . Well written
ReplyDeleteNice, sad story. Good work.
ReplyDeleteSad story but narrated extremely well!
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ReplyDeleteI liked your simple narration of this untold story..and loved the Red text of the story even more! It was very warm..
I don't know why, I kind of knew there was some tragic scene coming up..and I was hoping not now..not now.. :) The story and the affectionate relationship portrayed in the story was too sweet to deserve a blow!
All the best for BAT 32 :)
I love the way you wrote but I hate sad stories :( Good Luck to you! Keep writing :)
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Very well narrated sad story, I got really involved in the story :)
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Good narration.
ReplyDeleteI wish it wasn't a sad ending. Tanay kept giving trailers or the story.. but couldn't tell her the actual story. Sad!!
ummm... i was fearing the end! it was predictable and i wish it had a happily ever after kind of ending! :)
ReplyDeletegood attempt! good luck!
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ReplyDeleteI dont like tragic stories, not unless Im over excited or super happy do I read sad stories, just to keep my excitement in check, and guess this was one of those times..
well written.
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